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         "I hope you're ready for this, she can be pretty intimidating you know. But don't get your hopes too awful high either, like I said before, she's a really shy one that girl. So we'll just have to wait and see. I did bring her favorite food though, so hopefully she'll come out today." Scotland had you out in the middle of the Loch Ness, in a very small boat. It looked like it may start pouring down rain at any minute. "She does love this kind of weather you know, makes it harder for people to spot her." He pulled some rather stinky cheese from a barrel he'd brought aboard the boat. "It's Vieux Boulogne, one of the stinkiest cheeses in the world. But it's Nessie's favorite. She should be able to smell it no matter where she is."

"I don't doubt it, that stuff smells awful." You covered your nose with your hand and scrunched up your face in disgust.

"I know it. I don't know what would make a lovely sea serpent like her like such a pungent cheese. Oh that might be her." Scotland pointed out a slight ripple in the water not far away. "Hey Nessie, I've got your favorite snack here." He waved around the cheese over the side of the boat. The rippling water came closer and closer until it was right beside the boat. The smile on Scotland's face was one of pure joy."She's here."

You couldn't believe what you were seeing. There was an obvious shadow of something huge, bigger even than a whale underneath the water. "That's really her then huh?" You're question was answered by a large beast rising from the water. It didn't look anything like the pictures you'd seen. Her face was dragon like, scales and all, but somehow gentle at the same time. The scales shimmered even with the sun hidden behind the clouds. Her eyes were  the blackest black you'd ever seen. She was lacking anything that really resembled fins too, instead she had a pair of small web like wings. Her feet from what you could tell were also webbed. Black spikes ran the length of her body.  You now noticed, her body would slightly change color with the lighting. You'd never seen anything like her. "She's beautiful."

"Isn't she though? You want to feed her? It's the only way she's going to trust you enough to ever let you ride on her back." Scotland handed you some of the cheese. Nessie's eyes intently followed the exchange.

"Sure, so I just hold it out to her I guess then."  You were a bit apprehensive, you were about to feed cheese to the Loch Ness Monster, and she was huge. Holding the snack out for Nessie, you waited. She slowly moved her enormous body towards your hand. Scotland placed a hand on your shoulder to prevent you from jerking away. As gently, and gracefully as a butterfly, Nessie took the gift from the palm of your hand. A second later, she was rubbing up against you like a cat. You couldn't keep from smiling. "I think she likes me."

Scotland nodded. "I think so too." The clouds started to break, a bright beam of sunlight touched the water and Nessie quickly dove back down into the depths. "You were amazing." Scotland picked you up and spun you around. "She's never been that friendly to anyone before. She even bit me the first time I tried to touch her." He put you down and kissed you. "You'll be riding on her back in no time. Now, we've got to let you tell Britain she's real. He may think I'm crazy, but there's no way he'll not believe you. Also, we need to find something to do with all this nasty cheese."
First I would like to say I very much enjoyed writing this.
Second, I would like to say this is a part 2, so please read this first.…

This comes next…

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GoblinQueenSelene Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014
Cute story. I like your description of Nessie.
carterrico99 Featured By Owner Edited Oct 28, 2014
Put the cheese in iggy's house for not believing in Nessie !
CreativeCookieCake Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Student Writer
Dat picture...  :retarded-drool: 
Katniss-HP-Twilight Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013
*scoffs* England you have a Flying Mint Bunny and a unicorn, don't doubt Nessie
Pokepal5 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
*throws cheese in Scotlands face* You'll never catch me alive!!
GaarasCookieLove Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013
i think i know what to do with the nasty cheese... *looks to scotland with a mischievous grin*

scotland: Thats just what i was thinking~. 

*heads for brittains house*
carterrico99 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2014
OMG I just commented that dang
Halloweengirly Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You just read my mind!! 😝
GaarasCookieLove Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2014
Nox-Noble Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That plan XD
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